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All of Mucho

Every last one of you. Except you're not poets.

win

by xzekiel

submitted October 12th 2012

182 comments
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comments (182)
Own up. Take your ball and go home.
5 years ago
pog suib uje
5 years ago
you're an asshat
just sayin....
5 years ago
I'm waiting for that one comment....
5 years ago
liked it
5 years ago
thank you
4 years ago
watch it all jrob
5 years ago
your parents must have beat you then kicked you out of their house at no later then 9 years old?
5 years ago
poetry = not an art form anyone gives 2 shits about
5 years ago
hey zeke. Except that it's not your language. Accept that I know it better.
5 years ago
you're not listening
5 years ago
this is a bit of an experiment btw
5 years ago
and you failed
5 years ago
good.
5 years ago
although I admit I did read your description wrong
5 years ago
i'm gonna post my slam here btw......you can click stfu all you want, but here it is
She is....

Sweating and running away
from the evil at her heels
looking back and fearing
still waiting just to feel
that clammy hand on her shoulder
which spins her around to see
everything she's been running from
she can not find a key
to escape this cage of terror
which she fell into from above
darkness surrounds
still she feels some form of love
for the first time in her life
she thinks she may belong
then the cold wind blows against her back
and she knows that she was wrong

she's spinning around in circles
in a cold and empty haze
there is no way for her to evade
this seemingly endless maze
she feels the warmth from the fires of hell
then snaps back into the freezing air
she's screaming and punching
a brick wall
but then she stops and stares
as Satan steps out of the brick
he wipes a tear from her eye
he then saddles his purple unicorn
and into the darkness he flies

once again she is alone
except for the terror creeping up inside
she turns and faces to stand her ground
but there's nothing there to find
she staggers along in the miserable cold
filled with confused anger and fright
she's all alone in this depraved world
but then she sees a light

she stops in wonder
and watches it swell
and thinks that she is found
her legs are taken from beneath her
and she falls hard to the ground
the horn that sounds
from the speeding blur
pushes her deeper into nervous grips
the pain in her legs shoots up her spine
and blood runs over her lips
she pulls herself into a ditch
and embraces the frosty earth
she cries in pain and loneliness
and contemplates her worth

here she lies
bloody and crying
with a razorblade at her throat
on the verge of suicide
no one cares to read a note
and here she lies for a lifetime
gazing at stars blurred by tears
brainwashed by her anguish
her emptiness and fears

the blood and tears
are washed away
through the gutter beneath her head
there is no use fighting any more
she feels already dead
she knows she doesn't belong to this world
and must move on to the next
she cuts a smile in her throat
and her muscles all relax

blood flows freely from her neck
as oxygen hisses out
she crosses her arms atop her breast
and holds two fingers out
the moon appears from behind the clouds
before she lapses into black
the only one that gives a fuck
knows she's never coming back.
5 years ago
it needs work
5 years ago
tl;dr
5 years ago
i need a drink
5 years ago
and you are a poem
5 years ago
match it hank
5 years ago
that actually sucks......i wrote it as "you" and then i revised it.....and i blows
5 years ago
what's the rhyme scheme on that, dubber?
5 years ago
it's slam
and fuxk you tr
5 years ago
is this about our mucho fiasco last night?
good poetry dude
5 years ago
this has nothing to do with you
thank you
fuck off
5 years ago
that "slam" is practically unreadable. how about you film yourself reading it?
5 years ago
How about you film yourself doing proper pushups?
5 years ago
you know what it will take to see that, big red
5 years ago
You actually being able to do a pushup?
5 years ago
that would be part of it, but the real delay was addressed on a previous submission.
5 years ago
* smerf doesn't actually give a shit *
5 years ago
did you ever total up how many times you've made a comment that said that, big red?

because even doing it once kind of takes credence away from you not giving a shit, doesn't it?
5 years ago
supreme fucking faggot. who the fuck posts break up poems on Mucho? and its not even original or decent.. go watch the crow and slit your writs homo
5 years ago
hello kettle
5 years ago
tr, what I do for the hell of it really isn't anything I care about.
5 years ago
um... what now? that doesnt even make sense possum.. never once have i showed such an emo bitch side of myself. because it doesnt exist.
5 years ago
but you're still a supreme fucking faggot
5 years ago
har har har.. who got your ginger pubes in a twist smerf?
5 years ago
Oh, nothing much. Just felt like fucking around on mucho
5 years ago
alright then.. but c'mon, really? poetry?
5 years ago
Hey, you see me writing any?
5 years ago
* tr_willk calculates that this thread is now 14.29% gay. *
5 years ago
wrong, its near 100%, as soon as i leave. good night fags
5 years ago
where's that wife pic?
5 years ago
says the out of the closet fag ^^
5 years ago
i made it to "sweating"
5 years ago
garbarge

5 years ago
I wrote that when I was 16.....and posted it incredibly drunk
5 years ago
Crap.
5 years ago
* xzekiel drinks *

YOU'RE NOT LISTENING
5 years ago
i'm taking my ball and going home
5 years ago
*makodragon taps beers* drink up sunshine
5 years ago
I almost titled this"Hankchinaski"
5 years ago
You don't know shit from sunshine.
5 years ago
hank is an expert shit eater, hence why he married an asian. For the scat fetish and tight pussy
5 years ago
So.....why did you marry your father?

5 years ago
For the cock.
5 years ago
we thought it was funny then.....
5 years ago
i'm gonna go throw up
5 years ago
calm down man
5 years ago
psst - so has he passed out yet?
5 years ago
Damn, drunk zeke?
5 years ago
apparently so
5 years ago
i wonder why cuntscan upvoted it, i thought she hated black people
5 years ago
I dont know about black people..but she clearly hates your chicklet selling beaner face
5 years ago
um
5 years ago
You call this poetry? None of that rhymed.
5 years ago
I said that once when i was playing basketball. Because they were cheating. I'm going to take my ball and go home! Fuck yall!
5 years ago
I hate cheaters.
5 years ago
I'm taking my severe under bite and going to the dentist.
5 years ago
ROG-you hater you!
5 years ago
i respect slam poetry as an art form, but its too pretentious for me to enjoy... saw a slam event once that was only war veterans, that shit was more tangible, more justifiably emotionally charged... this, i cant get behind. post a vid of your own live slam poetry and i will UV like a motherfucker zeke
5 years ago
um - how is slam poetry different from poetry in general?
5 years ago
as in, they are both pretentious in nature?
5 years ago
i just want to find my own poetry to enjoy, i dont want random emotions thrown in my face that i cant really connect to
5 years ago
the only poets i like are TS Eliot and eecummings
5 years ago
Poe, Kipling
5 years ago
Suess
5 years ago
i dont Poe, i've never Kippled
5 years ago
lol
5 years ago
how can you compare words as an art form to something like music,painting...hell even dancing or acting?
I think your mostly right jerky..pretentious drivel..why else does every 14 yo girl write that shit?
5 years ago
jerks - you actually got that ref/joke ?
5 years ago
Just as an aside, I drove through (well around) Denver twice today.. what a shit hole.
5 years ago
Pretty sure most art IS pretentious drivel.
5 years ago
Denver - Gary Indiana on MST
5 years ago
"slam" is "poetry" written by people that mostly don't know anything about poetry.
5 years ago
geez tr - really?
5 years ago
yep
5 years ago
i think it's funny when folks misunderstand the gist of my drift
5 years ago
bottom line, there is a whole bunch of technical information and criticism to read in order to become a "poet."

of course, some people think that they can just get up on stage and yell some crap and call it poetry.
5 years ago
I have published poems, fact.

GranolaStore, explain why your traffic is worse than Phoenix, Vegas, Omaha, and KC combined.
5 years ago
in school she sits across from me
her face is like a melody
but which one? i hate to say...
tis the tune Anchors Aweigh
5 years ago
a nice effort, but the third line is fucked up
5 years ago
try "alas, which one, i hate to say"
5 years ago
it was published in 1979 dude
5 years ago
i guess to make it "perfect" change the last line to:

the tune is called anchors aweigh
5 years ago
i was 12
5 years ago
SLAM!
5 years ago
the criticism is based on the number of syllables per line
5 years ago
* possum funks *
5 years ago
* smerf has also been published, but will be damned if he can recall the name of the compilation. *
5 years ago
@poss..... i did not get that reference, just assumed it was a "possism"... and fuck you, gary IN is way fucked. Denver is actually voted, by many, as a top city to live in.... shit, marijuana is LEGAL here. there are parts that are really hood, and parts that are really yuppie... and a shitload inbetween, thats where i fall.

@Roland, suburban sprawl man..... the commute is fucked. thats why i take public transit.
5 years ago
Jerk, I also love kibble.
5 years ago
Q: Do you like Kipling?
A: I dont know, I've never Kippled.

* possum bows *
5 years ago
* Jones applaudes *

... ENCOREEeee!!
5 years ago
I take the E-470. ;)
5 years ago
made me giggle
6 months ago
Sorry Claude, wherever you are :(
5 years ago
In Lino just crossing mrorial bridge. Brain on very long leash :/
5 years ago
Notttoself chng zavyter
5 years ago
....drunk or using a phone?
5 years ago
Bothh
5 years ago
cats cant use phones
5 years ago
Fair enough, claude. Fair enough.

Just don't get your wallet stolen. that's what happened to me last time I got drunk
5 years ago
No im I'm car long ride home. Looking for prostitutes and pankakes
5 years ago
Btw Zeke when I get home I'm going to print yer poem and puikke onit
5 years ago
I didn't find out my wallet was stolen until after the cab ride got us back. Luckily, my buddy had cash
5 years ago
hahaha damn how did i miss this. Poor Claudey:(
5 years ago
Poor claude? Fuck that, he's drunk and he doesn't have to drive
5 years ago
Just realized how good I am at drunk translating.
5 years ago
dik taught me well.
5 years ago
Fuck that noise Smerf, he's muchoing and he doesn't have to drive.
5 years ago
worst.def.comedy.jam.comedian.ever
5 years ago
I'm gonna stop drinking for a while.....
5 years ago
no
5 years ago
zeke pulls a squidley :P
5 years ago
* Jones slowclaps *
5 years ago
Is zeke sober? NO! IM TAKING My BALL AND GOING HOME
5 years ago
I'm actually a very good listener when I'm not drunk.
5 years ago
who has two thumbs and is a very active listener?
5 years ago
right here
5 years ago
fuck you flintstone
5 years ago
<3 ya Uncle Fester.
5 years ago
can i tell you a story, zeke?
5 years ago
It Was A Dark And Stormy Night...
5 years ago
suddenly i saw some arabs chasing some other arabs
5 years ago
and there were firemen chasing after both groups of Arabs
5 years ago
the firemen were suddenly distracted by a sign for an Italian bistro, and feeling a bit peckish - they pulled over and went in
5 years ago
the first fireman looked at the menu....
5 years ago
anyway - the punch line is:
"then he ordered pizza and pretended it was clams"
5 years ago
thank you and good night!
5 years ago
zeke was sober 11 hours ago????
not from my reports
5 years ago
no i was not.
5 years ago
i like your stories btw possum
5 years ago
everyone who downvoted this are just lying to themselves
or bitter at me
* xzekiel runs *

LOL LOOOOOOOSERS
5 years ago
I like dik and snap and jerkstore
the rest of you can lick my balls
5 years ago
i'ma go for real
5 years ago
love you zeke!
5 years ago
* possum buys more lube *
5 years ago
it takes a big person to acknowledge this
5 years ago
and i noted it
5 years ago
Stop acting like a bitchwhorecunt
5 years ago
stop being a fakeassbitch
5 years ago
i will when you do
5 years ago
which is never.......
5 years ago
jewfro faggot
5 years ago
I'll knock you the fuck out!
5 years ago
go on.....
5 years ago
I'm listening, really
5 years ago
That....that was the end of the story.
5 years ago
The point is, you're all fucking losers, as am I.
Time to move on?
5 years ago
I was a fat kid with a stutter, get over it.
5 years ago
No one cares anymore
5 years ago
* xzekiel pops beer *
5 years ago
Another meltdown?
5 years ago
stop being a faggot.
get off my nuts.
5 years ago
It's his mutant ability Freshie.
5 years ago
why is this most discussed?
why do you faggots talk about me?
5 years ago
If you do the math, it might be because you spamed 15 comments, with only 5 replies.
5 years ago
^that
5 years ago
i really don't listen to peoplle that pretend they're dogs
5 years ago
but whatever
5 years ago
If you want to continue being an attention whore for the site, at least do it proper.
5 years ago
to be honest you're all fat, ugly and unpopular.....i thought you'd relate
5 years ago
but no, you just dumped it
5 years ago
all you fat, ugly assholes
5 years ago
you know who you are
5 years ago
* squatface cries. *
5 years ago
tears are rolling down my face listening to this shit
they tickle
4 years ago
* xzekiel mehs and walks off *
4 years ago
oops....almost forgot my ball
4 years ago
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